Můj běžný den

Zdravím, chtěla bych se zeptat, jestli je tohle* vyprávění na téma ‘Můj běžný den’ napsané dobře. Byla bych moc ráda za vás čas a pmoc *Through the week I am at boarding school, because the school to which I study is far away from my home. I'd rather be at home, but the end of the school year ending soon and after a while will be holidays. I usually get up about half past six in the morning. I make my bed and go to the bathroom. There I have a shower and brush my teeth. Sometimes I go at breakfast, but mostly not, I don't like eat in the morning. When I’m dressed, I'm going to school, or on practice. When I go to school, lessons starting at 8 o’clock and ending at one o'clock in the afternoon. On practice I must go by bus already at 7:30 am and then I work until 15:00 pm. When in the afternoon I will come at my room I rest. Then I have a shower and watch TV. Sometimes I go out with my friends and we play football, or just talk together. Before dinner, which starts at 17:30 pm, I play PC games, chatting with my friends on facebook.. When the dinner doesn't taste, I go buy something better to eat. Then I call my parents and again I’m on facebook, watch TV, or listening music. I go to bed around 23:00 pm. I’m very happy, when is weekend and I’m home. I go to bed late and I get up too late, I eat good food from my mother. I can ride on my bike and motorbike, be with my friends and girlfriend, go to party.

Over the week I am at boarding school, because the school in which I study is far away from my home. I'd rather be at home, but the school year ends soon and after a while there will be holidays. I usually get up about half past six in the morning. I make my bed and go to the bathroom. There I have a shower and brush my teeth. Sometimes I have breakfast, but mostly not, I don't like to eat in the morning. When I’m dressed, I go to school, or on practice. When I go to school, lessons start at 8 o’clock and end at one o'clock in the afternoon. On practice I must go by bus already at 7:30 am and then I work until 15:00 pm. In the afternoon I come into my room and have(take) a rest. Then I have a shower and watch TV. Sometimes I go out with my friends and we play football, or just talk together. Before dinner, which starts at 17:30 pm, I play PC games, chat with my friends on facebook.. When the dinner doesn't taste, I go to buy something better to eat. Then I call my parents and again I’m on facebook, watch TV, or listening to music. I go to bed around 23:00 pm. I’m very happy, when weekend comes and I’m home. I go to bed late and I get up too late, I eat good food from my mother. I can ride on my bike and motorbike, be with my friends and girlfriend, go to party.

EDIT: Ve vyprávění, při popisu činností, které děláme běžně se preferuje present simple.

Moc děkuji!

During the week is even better,

Regarding time – if you're using 24 hour time, don't use am/pm. Also, it's not very common to write “8 o'clock”- we say it, but don't write it.

There are other small things, but start with these